外教对Tom进步情况的阶段评估（节选）
General comments
It is getting easier for you to talk more on the topics during class. I think you have good opinions on the topics for this week and were able to express your ideas more clearly. Your vocabulary list is expanding but just be careful with the minor grammatical mistakes. For example, “In the high school...” would not be correct. You would just say, “In high school…” Pay attention to your past tense also.
Things you did well
FAILED STATES INDEX: This indicates a state (nation) whose central government is so weak or ineffective that it has little practical control over much of its territory; non-provision of public services; widespread corruption and criminality; refugees and involuntary movement of populations; sharp economic decline.
REDOLENT: (a) A smell that is fragrant or smells really bad. In general, it is describing an odor. Example: redolent of garlic (b) suggestive, reminiscent. Example: The verse is redolent of Shakespere
Corrections
Incorrect: Maybe they will broke out a very big conflict
Correct: A big conflict between these two nations may break out
Incorrect: Keep you back in school...
Correct: The school will hold you back a grade if you don’t do well on the exams.
Incorrect: My parents experience my sister’s feelings.
Correct: My parents already went through that experience with my older sister so they…
Incorrect: Even we do the cramming a lot…
Correct: Even if we cram a lot before the exams..
Original Sentence: A lot of work to accomplish this system.
Suggested Sentence: A lot of effort to accomplish this system.
Incorrect: They didn’t take it very important.
Correct: They didn’t take it very seriously.
Incorrect: I haven’t seen a person in Alcoholic.
Correct: I haven’t met an Alcholic person.
Incorrect: They are very clever and will not harm themselves.
Correct: They are very responsible so they will not harm themselves.
